Hilbert Hagedoorn:

Cooler Master "MasterBox NR200 / 200P is a mITX case

Ouch. That is an awful article. Bad grammar and language. You never start a sentence with "And". You should use the inverted pyramid model for how you structure an article. Start with the overview, then go into the more technical and fine details. You are just listing technical specifications and details all over the place. This makes it very hard to follow. What you should do is to describe the cases in a more generic way, explaining what the difference is between the two models, and then have a breakout box where you list the technical details. It's not hard, and it will make it much easier to read. Let's look at the first section of the article:

And it can hold seven fans. Cooler Master released a Mini-ITX / Mini-DTX case that can mount a total of 7 fans, top 120mmx2, rear 92mmx1, bottom 120mmx2, side 120 / 140mmx2. The product lineup is the "MasterBox NR200P" , which uses tempered glass on the left side, and the "MasterBox NR200" , which is a metal panel with ventilation holes, and comes in two color variations, black and white.

Something like this would be much better:

Cooler Master has released two new products in their MasterBox NR200 series of Mini-ITX computer cases. The two new models are NR200 and NR200P, where the latter has a tempered glass side panel instead of the ventilated metal on the base model. Both cases are available on two colors, black and white, and one of the features Cooler Master highlights on the cases is the ability to mount up to seven fans in the case. The rear exhaust allows for a 92mm fan, while the rest of the fan positions can use 120mm fans. The two side fan positions also support 140mm fans.

You see how much easier it is to read? Good luck in your writing.

TexasSwede:

Ouch. That is an awful article. Bad grammar and language. You never start a sentence with "And". You should use the inverted pyramid model for how you structure an article. Start with the overview, then go into the more technical and fine details. You are just listing technical specifications and details all over the place. This makes it very hard to follow. What you should do is to describe the cases in a more generic way, explaining what the difference is between the two models, and then have a breakout box where you list the technical details. It's not hard, and it will make it much easier to read. Let's look at the first section of the article:

And it can hold seven fans. Cooler Master released a Mini-ITX / Mini-DTX case that can mount a total of 7 fans, top 120mmx2, rear 92mmx1, bottom 120mmx2, side 120 / 140mmx2. The product lineup is the "MasterBox NR200P" , which uses tempered glass on the left side, and the "MasterBox NR200" , which is a metal panel with ventilation holes, and comes in two color variations, black and white.

Something like this would be much better:

Cooler Master has released two new products in their MasterBox NR200 series of Mini-ITX computer cases. The two new models are NR200 and NR200P, where the latter has a tempered glass side panel instead of the ventilated metal on the base model. Both cases are available on two colors, black and white, and one of the features Cooler Master highlights on the cases is the ability to mount up to seven fans in the case. The rear exhaust allows for a 92mm fan, while the rest of the fan positions can use 120mm fans. The two side fan positions also support 140mm fans.

You see how much easier it is to read? Good luck in your writing.

And your first message here, what a way to start your rep.....ripping in to the boss`s article without even considering that the first sentence may have got lost in editing.....you sound like a wanna be school teacher that has 0 friends. You could of ( oh sorry...have)started with a sarcastic comment or something witty .......but NO you went straight for the throat.....and slash, if only there was a thumbs down button.

And.....dont let the door hit you in the face on the way out....did they tell you that at the University of how to be a dick.

TexasSwede:

Ouch. That is an awful article. Bad grammar and language. You never start a sentence with "And". You should use the inverted pyramid model for how you structure an article. Start with the overview, then go into the more technical and fine details. You are just listing technical specifications and details all over the place. This makes it very hard to follow. What you should do is to describe the cases in a more generic way, explaining what the difference is between the two models, and then have a breakout box where you list the technical details. It's not hard, and it will make it much easier to read. Let's look at the first section of the article:

And it can hold seven fans. Cooler Master released a Mini-ITX / Mini-DTX case that can mount a total of 7 fans, top 120mmx2, rear 92mmx1, bottom 120mmx2, side 120 / 140mmx2. The product lineup is the "MasterBox NR200P" , which uses tempered glass on the left side, and the "MasterBox NR200" , which is a metal panel with ventilation holes, and comes in two color variations, black and white.

Something like this would be much better:

Cooler Master has released two new products in their MasterBox NR200 series of Mini-ITX computer cases. The two new models are NR200 and NR200P, where the latter has a tempered glass side panel instead of the ventilated metal on the base model. Both cases are available on two colors, black and white, and one of the features Cooler Master highlights on the cases is the ability to mount up to seven fans in the case. The rear exhaust allows for a 92mm fan, while the rest of the fan positions can use 120mm fans. The two side fan positions also support 140mm fans.

You see how much easier it is to read? Good luck in your writing.

Your kidding right? This is a tech forum not an english class and he's not getting graded.

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Hilbert from Holland does great in the English language. Me, also from Holland want to learn about the information he's giving us. 🙂